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[edit] Copyediting that this article needs
- It reads a bit like a news report, rather than an encyclopedia article.
- All the sentences are quite long, and read like a list of facts rather than paragraphing. (The sentences are sufficiently long that it looks like full stops are missing, but they're just spaced well apart.)
- There are a couple of minor spelling and punctuation problems.
- One of the external links is messed up (because only webpages can be linked to, not Javascript code).
(This is in response to a query by User:Forever Old.) --ais523 14:23, 31 August 2006 (UTC)
